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Okay, this poem is easier to understand. Give me an honest opinion, please?
This one I wrote a while ago. Basically, it's about finding happiness in times of sadness. I would very much like some constructive criticism! 
Bring me beauty in a rainstorm
So I can see the light in dark
May I wake up feeling reborn
With no memories to mark
Bring me something to live for
Harden my skin like concrete
Make it difficult to bruise, to sore
Dull the pain in every heartbeat
Bring me purpose in a butterfly
So that I'll never lose a step
May it be there never is 'goodbye'
Where a memory is kept
Bring me solace in a universe
While the sun is setting cold
Under shelter bold and terse
Littering canopies in gold
Bring me peace amidst chaos
Let me be the one to speak
When the nights fold in on us
I will not be amongst the weak
Bring me Summer everlasting
Banish Winter with a kiss
Guide me further as I'm crashing
Into needles tipped with bliss
Bring me beauty in a rainstorm
This is actually quite a bit better than the other one:- but you still have far too many words that are mainly opinions (beauty, pain, purpose, solace) fudging out the words that refer to actual things (rainstorm, concrete, butterfly).
You also probably haven't thought of this yet, but when you put 'rainstorm' the word probably doesn't mean the same to you as it does to me.
Most of the rainstorms I have seen were in the north Taff valley, but I have also seen quite a few in central Africa. The ones around Chililabombwe were very different from the ones around Troedyrhiw. I would guess the rainstorms you have seen may well be different again.
A poem needs to make the world it references (in general): words need to be specific, so the reader knows precisely what you are talking about.
I don't often do this, but for once I shall link to one of my own postings.
I think the pictures in my poem are much clearer than the pictures in yours. And I think my pictures are clearer for fairly straightforward reasons (including that I don't use much abstract vocabulary).
I mentioned before: imagism isn't the only way to write. But it is a technique you will need to master before you can move forward.
Thanks for visiting!
